「原创」为什么IVEY商学院的文案难写？

「原创」为什么IVEY的文案难写？

IVEY 上学院是加拿大最好的管理学院，没有之一。多大的Rotman, 约克的Schulich虽然名声在外，但是也是以会计和金融为主打专业方向，就管理学和MBA来说，和IVEY还是有一定差距的。作为加拿大最有声望的管理学院，IVEY秉承案例法教学，强大的校友网络也为学生之后的就业，甚至创业积累下良好的人脉。但是IVEY本科生入学申请的竞争也相当激烈，除了平均分一定至少要达到90分以上，对于学生的课外活动等综合水品也要求极高。接下来小敏老师就从几个方面来为大家讲解IVEY上学院本科入学文案的情况。

1、IVEY商学院本科入学文案内容是什么？

IVEY商学院文案本身的内容并不复杂，除了和OUAC上面一样要提供高中阶段四年的学习记录以外，学生只需要再写3个高中阶段的课外活动，活动内容包含以下几个分类：

Student Government 学生会和其他学校组织

Athletics 竞技体育

Club/Society/Orgs 俱乐部/社会职位/社会组织

Community Involvement 社区工作

Entrepreneurial Venture 创业

Performing Arts 文艺表演

Work Experience 工作经历

学生可以填写三个活动，每个活动的描述字数不超过500字，并且要提供活动组织人，或者你当时参加活动的推荐人的邮箱，IVEY录取中是一定会联系该推荐人的，所以建议学生一定要确认联系方式是正确的，如果IVEY无法联系你的推荐人，你将不会被录取。

2、IVEY商学院对文案的要起是什么？

When assessing your extracurricular involvement, we’re looking for teamwork experience and, in particular, your contribution to the team or group. If, for example, your sports team or school band made it to the city finals or provincials, make sure you also tell us about your part in that achievement. We’re not assessing your team, group or club, we’re assessing your involvement and the impact you had.

We also look for initiative - have you introduced something or made something better? Have you stretched outside of your comfort zone to try something new? Did you see an opportunity and take action?

When we read your activity descriptions, we’ll also be looking for achievement.Make sure to tell us about goals and whether those were met or exceeded. Let us know if you, your team or group were recognized with awards or any type of distinction.

Lastly, we want to see significant commitment to your activities over time and breadth in your interests.

Provide a contact name, position, email and phone number for verification of each activity. Applications lacking contact name and details for verification purposes will not be considered for admission to the HBA Program.

The format for the activity descriptions is an essay. Please use full sentences (no bullet points) and keep to the limit of 500 words when describing each activity. Remember to check your spelling and grammar since the ability to communicate clearly and concisely is important.

从以上的IVEY文案要求我们可以发现，学校通过这个文案，希望了解学生的几个非学术素养：

团队合作精神

主动性

成就

学生课外活动质量：参与活动的质量以及时间的跨度

3、为什么说IVEY的文案难写？

其实就内容和字数上来说，IVEY的文案并不复杂，比多大世嘉宝的SAF，UBC的文案还简单一些。但是IVEY的文案的要求是不写Reflective内容，而是要写你在活动中具体做了什么，最后的结果是什么，有什么突出成就。

例文：

SAMPLE ESSAY

It all started when I joined my school’s FIRST robotics team in the ninth grade. FIRST Robotics is an international program where high school students have six weeks to design and construct a robot from a standard kit of parts. Teams of 25 students or more are challenged to raise funds, gain sponsorships, build and program robots that compete in games.

In grade 10 our team made history by becoming the first all-girls team to win the prestigious Regional Chairman’s Award, which reserved us a spot at the World Championship. The Chairman’s Award is given to the team that demonstrates the greatest commitment to spreading passion about science and technology into their schools and community.

In grade 11, our team returned home from competition empty-handed. Most of the girls, whom I had admired from my first year, had graduated, and it seemed like our team’s inspiration had left with them. Having experienced such success one year and then failure the next, I became determined. I vowed to bring the team back to the Championship event, so other team members could share the amazing experience I had.

To achieve this goal during my final year of high school, I decided we needed to focus on recruiting sponsors and new mentors as well as building awareness in our school and community. Our executive committee created a list of past and potential sponsors and divided the list amongst committee members. I made on-site sponsorship pitches to various local companies that helped us secure new sponsors. This was important because building a robot is expensive. A teammate and I demonstrated our robot at a parent teacher night at the school and at Western to help kick off the 2018 Business Cares Food drive which was covered in the local media. This publicity introduced us to two people who volunteered to become our team’s mentors.

The design and build of the robot requires a high degree of teamwork with the coordination of many components. As the captain, I worked closely with the team’s advisors and mentors to organize the project. One of my most important tasks was to provide direction and make sure the newer members of the team actually did some of the hands-on work. This allows new members to learn more and hopefully, stay with the team. I've made sure our executive includes students from lower grades so we have future leaders and more successful years to come. 

So, how did we do? In grade 12 we advanced to the World Championship in NYC and won the Engineering Inspiration award!

这是一篇标准的IVEY入学申请例文，从文章中我们可以看出，这个女生高中四年有一个持续性的课外活动就是学校的机器人小组，并且一路从学校达到国际赛事！另外除了自己在小组里进行机器人研究，还参与了社区推广。学生的文字很直白，没有什么修饰性的语词，看似平铺直叙，但是内容上很扎实。所以说，IVEY的文案之所以难写，其实并不是写起来难，而是对于学生当时参加的活动，和学生能力要求高。如果学生本身参加了很多高等级的活动，并且能力出众，在活动中扮演领导角色，或者在各级小组中获奖，那么其实就写作本身来说并不困难。

总结

如果学生要申请顶级商学院，那么一定要从9-10年纪开始规划，除了学习成绩需要名列前茅，一定要积极参与社区活动。当然商学院并不是适合每个学生的，有些孩子性格比较内向，可能就比较适合计算机、数学统计等技术型工作。但是如果您的孩子学习能力强，社交能力好，一定不要荒废了9-11年级的时间，应该尽早向小敏老师咨询，及早规划，从长计议，不要到了12年级找小敏老师申请大学、整理文案了才发现浪费了之前宝贵的时间。

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